Date: 24/06/09 07:18:32 pm Title: Arrival
of course I like it! Who wouldn't?!
Author's Response: Well your responce didn't specify so I wasen't sure . . . . Okay?
I'm so glad you liked it I'm in a little ditch right now but I promise I'll have the next chapter up ASAP. Thanks so much!! ;-)
Date: 21/06/09 10:46:58 am Title: Arrival
Hmm. I'm not quite sure. I'm pretty sure it would be the plain, boring "Extendeds" I really like the accent at the end though... so maybe "Extendes" would be better, you know, more original. And if anyone asks Gig or Spin or Wolf or anybody why it's "Extendes" instead of "Extendeds", they can just say "it sounded cooler"
*shrugs* There's nothing more you can really elaborate on that. There's no clever or intelligent reason behind it. Just sounded cooler. *cheesy grin*
Anyway, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. I need to see WHY and WHAT HAPPENS. You're a devious master-minded thriller-maker, Spin.
And I'm sorry. It's taking me forever to write this 'cause I'm watching this super-badass show called "Untamed and Uncut"
Good lord, this show is most gruesome! An octupus suction cupped itself to someone's face 80 feet underwater! And a shark bit the hell out of a fisherman's arm when it was supposed to be dead *whimpers*
I'm never boating in the ocean.
I'll see you later!
Author's Response: That's why I live in the desert . . . ;-)
Date: 20/06/09 06:55:40 pm Title: Arrival
No problem! And yes, I agree now that I've read her entire life-story in a more simple manner. She's very--what's the word?--Relateable? In a sense? I can empathize with her on being confused as to what to do next as a team leader. Though she sounds like she knows how to deal with things better than most people.
And yes, your characters and ideas are very believeable and realistic. I think you've got amazing potential to be a great author!
And about help, well, I guess I can. Just say the word and I'll help! In truth, I was kinda hoping you'd ask *digs foot in ground* I was smiling the entire time, but I knew I couldn't just say yes on a whim. I feel all warm and fuzzy inside knowing you want me to help *goofy grin*
I completely understand how things are out of your control. It happens all the time--that's what happens with most of my stories, too. I make sure to write an outline beforehand so I know where to go if I get lost. *sheepish grin*
I really like the originality of your characters and story. Though I have just one question. Is the group name Extendes, Extendeds, or Extendedes? I keep adding an accent at the end of the word, and I keep kicking myself every time I do it. It's been a question I've been wondering for a while. Sorry if I offended you...
Author's Response: That may be true, but she'd have to be good at what she does in order to have survived this far. Thanks for the compliment, I try . . .
Oh I see, yeah I never have an outline. To most people that may sound odd but I constently think about the story I'm writing. In private I'll act out scenes and rienforce my positions with diologe. It really helps because then I can get body language done really well! Anyway I'm trying to think of another story that I can do. I'm just thinking though . . . . not all that sure yet.
I know your issue and I've tried to resove it but I'm not all that sure. The type of person we're talking about is an Extended species, get it? So I had to make the word Extended, plural . . . does that make sense? I'm trying to think if if would be Extend -edes or Extend -es which is gramaticaly correct? I need to go back and make this clear . . . ;-)
Date: 19/06/09 11:48:06 pm Title: Arrival
It's kind of hard to think that Artemis only went there to get a vase. Hrm. *The Thinker pose*
And, in my opinion, I think that'll be quite the turn-table in the story. But, I have to say, I can't be the judge of your story. I live to read, and if I help with something I already know what'll happen... *sighs* I really want to help--truly, I do--but sometimes I just can't. It frustrates me to no end, but I seriously can't do that.
But, that idea is pretty cool. She's truly a remarkable 17-year-old (I am right, right? She's 17? I thought I saw it somewhere recently in your story) Most teenagers would just as soon give up their life as a village wouldn't want their idiot back. Impossible. But, since when do situations Artemis Fowl in impossible?
I'll see you later!
Author's Response: Not true! Artemis traveled and risked his life by nabbing The Fairy Thief what's the difference? Not to mention, he was REALLY bored, everyone does crazy things when they're bored. We've explained this already . . .
What's the turn table? The next few chapters or your crazy idea that Spin knew that Opal would betray her in the end? Not that it matters whatever does happen will happen it's out of my control. You understand right? I've gotten to the point where I know the ending and all it is, is just typing it out. So why do you say you can't help? No offence or anything, it's so close to the end that if there was a problem in the beginning or middle it's a tad too late to deal with it . . .
Yes Spin is 17. However I tried to make this whole thing a bit believable, I know it's already out there. But I thought the "how Spin got to this point" was realistic.
Basically she's done some things to ensure her identity change, money, and getting Extendedes to mass together:
She started with an understanding of Real Estate, from her father, which in Arizona is BIG money. That's how she started out, during this time she racked up people and funds, building.
Then when her force was large enough she made a few long term investments (the land Primary and Secondary is on) and became the producer of valuable weapons and information from the military (Luke Air Force Base, located in Phoenix, remember Guerrero say something about that?) Not to mention she made contacts with other cartels (peddling drugs, guns, workers (who all need new identities, how do you think she got so many herself?) and other stuff into the U.S. also big money in AZ) in Phoenix and became the middle man/woman in a few deals always making a profit. $$$
Enter the Spin we know. Well connected, business-like, strong, knows how to deal with adults (EX: Butler, Guerrero), team leader, money maker, good strategist.Everything has come together over years of exposure to the real world, which was something she could deal with, sort of. She's still a kid, we've seen her get too emotional, make mistakes, lose people (Spot) and create enemies where there could have been none.
I tried to make it seem somewhat real. Real enough to keep everyone interested and respectful of Spin's position. That's why the turn is such a shock because you respect and possibly like her a bit (for her faults and strengths) but this was all her plan
Wow, that was long wasn't it, sorry 'bout that . . . ;-)
Date: 19/06/09 09:29:43 pm Title: Arrival
Oh my gawd.
My heart is POUNDING. Literally! That seriously made me have a STROKE it was so shocking! Spin? The bad
guy girl? How could this be? I've been growing to like her, now she's another Opal?
Oh no! Please, no! Although I get this feeling you wouldn't do something like that to one of your own original, main characters. Something tells me Opals plot to thwart Spin's plan was actually what Spin was counting on.
And you said Spin had an average IQ. *huffs* Yeah, sure. You must have an IQ well-above 130 in order to create a story like this.
I'm still trying to find a battery to restart my heart with. I shall talk to you when you respond!
Author's Response: I told you this chapter was going to be AWESOME!!!!!
I'm so happy you like this twist, and the climax really hasen't happened yet, I have two or three more chapters and all of them reveal EVEN MORE!!!
And out of curiosity how do you think that could help the Extendedes? So Spin dies, her whole reason for living has been to prevent incidents like Hawk's from happening again. Did you not get the ticking-time-bomb thing? Her goal is to free the Extendedes AT ANY COST!!
Yes, Spin has an adverage IQ that's one of the many characteristics of this character I tried to bring into the forfront. Spin's character is based off of one principal, human will. Her will to survive has allowed her live as long as she has, and her plans were made out of pure desperation. And, for the resord, my IQ is something around 116, so not really all that high . . . ;-)
Date: 18/06/09 04:54:04 pm Title: Arrival
I will come to your defense! Holly's situation: Colfer said in the books that elves were emotional creatures by nature.
Butler: He doesn't know the fairies as much as Artemis does. And though he's with him every step of the way, Butler doesn't converse with the fairy folk as much as Artemis does. So, in the situation with N°1, Butler would have believed the warlock if N°1 had said he could have beaten them up. He's seen them all in action before.
And as for N°1, he's always trying to find ways to be courageous (sp?). In the book he's always trying to find ways to make-up for the cowardly things he did in Hybras. So I think you've got him in character perfectly, as long as you say something like "even though he put up a strong outer-front, his inner self was quivering in fear".
You're an amazing author. You shouldn't second-doubt yourself.
I'll see you later!
Author's Response: First: "Second doubt myself"???
Second: Thanks Meg, seriously, and N deg 1 is getting there I'm tell'in you!
I'm working on the next chapter now, though I don't think it'll be done today. I've got a lot to cover. Anyway, thanks again for the defesive wall you've placed around the legality of my character discriptions . . . ;-)
Date: 17/06/09 11:14:36 pm Title: Arrival
Wow! *jumps up and down* I cahn't belave eht! This ehs UHMAZANG!
I can't believe it! They finally see each other for the first time in... *counts fingers* It seriously hasn't been 3 days, has it? 3 days was stretched out over 30 chapters?
Wow, that's somethin' else. You should get a medal.
Anyway, I like the amount of information in here. Not overwhelming, not too little. That's what's cool about your chapters. You know when to put a filler and when to add information. This was kinda half and half. On one hand, it calms all the Artemis Fowl readers. We all know that Artemis Fowl fans just look for the juicy parts. But this chapter kind of calms them down (*snickers* they sound like little toddlers in that contex) and forces them to focus on the details.
I shallith speak to thou whenst thou replieth to thy's review.
Author's Response: Yeah I know, and its 40 chapters to be correct. I had to add a lot of the stuff that happened for obvious reasons.
I needed to make this chapter something of a filler in a way. The next chapter will blow your mind so I had to build it up with some info on how the hole thing was going down. Yes they're all toddlers in reality . . . I'm glad you liked it. Did you think I got Butler and the group down okay? I mean I know Holly isin't THAT emotional, and N deg 1 isin't THAT brave, and Butler would never condone N deg 1 attacking Spin if he didn't think it would work. He wouldn't think it would work because N deg 1 had said he could take her, but the Extendedes, especialy Spin,have always been more than they antisipated.
I figured this all out after the fact of course, but I'm not sure what else I could have done. Am I just second guessing myself or what? ;-)
Date: 14/06/09 07:05:06 pm Title: Arrival
Nah. I don't think I should. It's highly dangerous of me to be awake at that hour. Except for the weekdays, 'cause I just sleep during math class.
Don't you just hate school? I hate it with every fiber of my being and yet people tell me I'm going to be in it until I'm at least 26. That stings. It hurts, so I'm hoping to be out of college by the time I'm 23 with a Bachelor's degree in Computer Animation *cheesy thumbs-up* Or maybe Veterinary School. Or journalism.
Whatever. I'm still deciding. I have plenty of time until I get out of high school--4 years, in fact. I haven't even started yet *dies* I can only imagine what its like.
And no! I will NOT shut up! I live in a frickin' goddamn free country and I will say whatever the hell I want! If I want to talk about bunny rabbits and propellors and how ABSOLUTELY AMAZING AND LONG YOUR STORY is then I WILL!
*giggles* That's fun. I love using that on people. "Shut up!" "I live in Ah-mur-ee-cuh. I can say whatever I want and if you murder me for it, hey, your life is screwed in prison. Hope ma dad sees ya!" (My dad's a Correctional Officer. He helps keep peace inside his prison, which leads to the nickname "Peace Officer")
See ya! I can't wait for the next chapter! Even if it's going to have the dive-bombliciously LOOOOOOONG chapter. I'm anticipating it.
Author's Response: I don't hate school however I'm not thrilled about the time it takes from me when I'm at home when I'd rather be doing other things.
I seriously thought you were older. You right really well for someone your age, trust me!
Okay fine, you can make a really long comment if you REALLY want to, and I won't murder you for it! Great deal huh?
Yep see ya!! It might be, I'm not sure, but I'm sure you'll like it!!! ;-)
Date: 14/06/09 09:48:30 am Title: Arrival
Oh, whatEVER. You SO did not change that review up. I mean, c'mon *looks warily from side to side* I can't IMAGINE how stupid I would have to be to skip over THAT piece of detail *hoarse laugh* I mean, I'm not a COMPLETELY blonde, just dirty-blonde. No need to start cracking jokes right? *refuses to be humiliated*
Okay, when it comes to things like that, I'm completely idiotic. Like, painted-toenails-with-bubble-gum-and-pompoms-somehow-thrown-into-the-mix. Teehee. I didn't notice that.
And sorry if I seem a little.... tipsy. It's WAY too early for me to be up on a Sunday (*coughs9:32coughs*) and I'm a little hyper for some reason. So if things come out with a random splurge, don't be surprised.
Or.... try not to be surprised.
Whatever. It's just too early, how 'bout that? *drools* Even though my fingers are typing really fast, I can't see half of the things I'm writing. Spelling and grammar mistakes are imminent.
*southern accent* So is there gon' be 'nother chapteh taday? I can herdly wait! 'Seems ta me like ya wanna update fer us, eh? Sure ya do, hun. Sure ya do. Jus' go 'head and click the "submit" button and I'll be reviewin' fer a chapteh instead of jus' pointless fun.
Southern accents. You gotta love them. And Indian. They're so much fun to imitate. Although I can hardly see Artemis talking in an Irish accent. Somehow, Irish always seems... fun. Upbeat. Those people are hilarious; they always have something to say. I told my friend that if I were to ever go to Ireland, most of the time would be spent laughing about their accents. I wouldn't be able to understand them, they talk so fast! The ingenius things they say would be completely wasted on someone who's laughing at them for the way they speak. So rude, yes, but honesty is the best policy.
And Sorry to those of you who have Irish accents. It's just the plain, raw truth.
And you know you guys would do the same thang if you came to America *looks pointedly*
So yes, random and pointless. But, sometimes, we need to talk about weird things. Like fans and airbrush tattoos that are somehow mixed into the same sentence as Scooby-Doo and lampposts.
Being uptight and formal all the time isn't all that enjoyable. I like to be able to relax with people. *sits on couch*
..... Jesus. *hastily crosses heart* I told you I was tired. A long night of partying (wedding reception *snores* My feet are still hurting from the high heels) results in this. I shall resign from commenting while in my hazy state....
Author's Response: Shut up about me having the longest story!! What about you having the longest review!!! Dang, you must've been tired.
I've got classes tomorrow, and I just have to think of a way of doing all this. I know the end I just want to make this the coolest ending imaginable. In addition, it may take a few days to do so.
I think you should comment in this state, it makes you easier to laugh at . . . ;-)