I love this story. This is the third time that I've read it. Can you please update the second story? Thanks.

 Crazy Female LEPrecon

Hi. I LOVE this story. It's the second time that I've read it. I like how you play Holly. Look, I read somewhere that you allow other people to use your characters. You won't mind if I borrow Disasteress Rage, and Columbiaron do you? I sure hope not, because I'm almost finished with a fanfiction that I have that is on paper. I'm just asking if its okay to put it on the AFC site.

Author's Response: You do!??!?! I"M SO HAPPYYYYYYYYY. Thanks so much! Yeah, you can borrow Disasteress and Columbiaroan as long as you give credit for the characters in the authors note, and then pop me a link to the story your using them at. :D. I"m very honored that you want to use the characters, and I can't believe you've read it over, twice!!!!! THANKEE!!!!!! Can't wait to see what you make of Disasteress and Columbiaroan. -Dragonwings

I read the entire story, I'm not commenting on each chapter. I do like to save my time. I do have to say, your description is sucky. (Yes, I know that isn't a word.) You don't have much balance between dialogue and the regular writing. The story is also a fan-based story. It is very easy to relate to and the characters are somewhat easy to describe.

example:

Fury: Loyal to his sister, hates his father, wishes to be free, and has a temper.

Disatresss (or Holly): Has a lot of a temper, is loyal to her brother, and hates her father....

I also see the same pattern with each character of yours. I'm guessing you base characters off of yourself. You really shouldn't always; it does get old.

Spelling... don't even start me on it. You must hate it. No comment.

I'm glad you fished your story, but you make is so dramatic at the end and OCC the character. Not the best idea for an ending, but hey, what can I say it's your story.

Okay, I better stop going crazy with killing your story, but I think it does have a nice plot that progresses through it, something I've yet to accomplish. But, to say the least, It is a good story.

Author's Response: Now, I consider some of these points that I WILL defend on, so, don't take too much offense. I'm not requesting you to comment on each chapter. Dear lord, I know my stories weak points on this, thank you, and since this is one of my first stories.... I don't have time in my life to go re-write it all. Spelling!?!??!? I spell checked EVERYTHING. Disasteress was spelled wrong on PURPOSE. And the same pattern eh? Yeah, I can understand that comment, and this is in NOW WAY a self insertion. I'm not that stupid, thanks. Dramatic and OCC? Yes, Dramatic, OCC? No, I don't think so. Yes, I can see you seeing as the poem that Holly Wrote a bit OCC, but considering we don't know everything on Holly's character, I'd say that's up for debate. On a another note Thanks for the plot comment, and thanks for the five stars. :D Another note, Don't think that I refuse to acknowledge my weak points, but considering this story took a year to complete, I've changed a lot in writing. If you want to see GOOD pieces from me, go examine some of my more recent oneshots. Thanks Again for the crtitism! Bye! -DW

this was awesome!!! you so need to do more of these!!:D

Shit, I'm sorry I didn't give a better review below. I blame late nights and early mornings, amazing writing, and speechless tongues.

Seriously, it blew me away, and blew everything I've read in a long, long time right out of the water.