Date: 20/11/11 01:19:36 am Title: Fun Facts
Hi, it's me again. Listen, the story you mentioned, the one where her dad comes back, well, I've written a story about that. I was hoping that you'd allow me to post it. Would that be okay. My email address is email@example.com
Date: 19/11/11 02:53:19 am Title: Chapter 1 Nameless, and then Named
Hi. I LOVE this story. It's the second time that I've read it. I like how you play Holly. Look, I read somewhere that you allow other people to use your characters. You won't mind if I borrow Disasteress Rage, and Columbiaron do you? I sure hope not, because I'm almost finished with a fanfiction that I have that is on paper. I'm just asking if its okay to put it on the AFC site.
Author's Response: You do!??!?! I"M SO HAPPYYYYYYYYY. Thanks so much! Yeah, you can borrow Disasteress and Columbiaroan as long as you give credit for the characters in the authors note, and then pop me a link to the story your using them at. :D. I"m very honored that you want to use the characters, and I can't believe you've read it over, twice!!!!! THANKEE!!!!!! Can't wait to see what you make of Disasteress and Columbiaroan. -Dragonwings
Date: 16/10/10 10:59:46 am Title: Chapter 1 Nameless, and then Named
Okay, I'm slightly dyslexic so sorry, about the spelling thing. I have to spell check everything myself, and reread it three times to check it. And, I'm just going to say this story reminds me of Twilight. I have read them; they aren't bad books. Just they're sort of like your story without major crowds trying to push it down people's throat.
Like your characters are easy to describe like Twilights and the dramatic ending like twilight. DON'T KILL ME PLEASE. But this story reminds me of it.
Date: 14/10/10 10:53:38 am Title: FIN- Epilougue
I read the entire story, I'm not commenting on each chapter. I do like to save my time. I do have to say, your description is sucky. (Yes, I know that isn't a word.) You don't have much balance between dialogue and the regular writing. The story is also a fan-based story. It is very easy to relate to and the characters are somewhat easy to describe.
Fury: Loyal to his sister, hates his father, wishes to be free, and has a temper.
Disatresss (or Holly): Has a lot of a temper, is loyal to her brother, and hates her father....
I also see the same pattern with each character of yours. I'm guessing you base characters off of yourself. You really shouldn't always; it does get old.
Spelling... don't even start me on it. You must hate it. No comment.
I'm glad you fished your story, but you make is so dramatic at the end and OCC the character. Not the best idea for an ending, but hey, what can I say it's your story.
Okay, I better stop going crazy with killing your story, but I think it does have a nice plot that progresses through it, something I've yet to accomplish. But, to say the least, It is a good story.
Author's Response: Now, I consider some of these points that I WILL defend on, so, don't take too much offense. I'm not requesting you to comment on each chapter. Dear lord, I know my stories weak points on this, thank you, and since this is one of my first stories.... I don't have time in my life to go re-write it all. Spelling!?!??!? I spell checked EVERYTHING. Disasteress was spelled wrong on PURPOSE. And the same pattern eh? Yeah, I can understand that comment, and this is in NOW WAY a self insertion. I'm not that stupid, thanks. Dramatic and OCC? Yes, Dramatic, OCC? No, I don't think so. Yes, I can see you seeing as the poem that Holly Wrote a bit OCC, but considering we don't know everything on Holly's character, I'd say that's up for debate. On a another note Thanks for the plot comment, and thanks for the five stars. :D Another note, Don't think that I refuse to acknowledge my weak points, but considering this story took a year to complete, I've changed a lot in writing. If you want to see GOOD pieces from me, go examine some of my more recent oneshots. Thanks Again for the crtitism! Bye! -DW
Date: 16/08/10 01:01:13 pm Title: FIN- Epilougue
OH MY GOD. That was amazing, I swear. Yes, there were some things that needed a bit of going over, but other than that, it was terrific. I'm so happy you have a sequel going on right now.
Author's Response: MUCH THANKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Going over as in grammatical stuff? Probably. Meh, I actually failed my grammatic test- I got super good on vocab and writing flow. I am now re-taking my seventh grade grammatics. *grimaces* I'm really really really glad that YOUR glad that you are happy about the sequal- ;)- Exploring a LOT of territory on that one. Fleshing out Dis's character a bit more in the here and now- her new beliefs- and the Gunner beliefs that she lived with for sixty years- And everything falling on her head.... bla bla bla.... -DW
Date: 14/08/10 09:23:34 am Title: Chapter 1 Nameless, and then Named
Shit, I'm sorry I didn't give a better review below. I blame late nights and early mornings, amazing writing, and speechless tongues.
Seriously, it blew me away, and blew everything I've read in a long, long time right out of the water.
Author's Response: Nah, it's Ok. It did....? I mean, out of all my chapters, the last three are some of my favs, epologue (SPELLING-- GRRR!) inculded- but that good? YOU MAKE ME FEEL WARM AND FUZZY INSIDE...WHOOO!!!!!! *bursts into tears of happiness* Mucho thanks- Made my day!-DW