Date: 15/08/11 03:36:13 pm Title: Chapter 4
No, no, no, I wasn't trying to flame you! >.< It was supposed to be constructive criticism. If I was flaming you, I'd insult and point out all your mistakes and tell you that if you don't get it right the next time, get the hell off this site, you motherfucker.
See what I mean? I'm sorry if I wounded you. In my previous review.
But as for the story, I STILL DO NOT BELIEVE IT IS LEGAL TO OWN GUNS UNTIL YOU ARE OF AGE. Is Merci of age, because otherwise, I wouldn't care. And I have to ask: WHAT PART OF CALI DID YOU LIVE IN????????? D:>
Curiosity is killing me. X_X
Author's Response: Oh, sorry about that, but I still needed to stop typing drunk. XD. I take a lot of things very seriously so be careful 'bout that too. And, you didn't. Where I lived was in Cresent City. It litterally is foggy, rainy, cold, damp. Dead impossible to get a tan and it's a very poor town. I own a gun, and I'm not of age.... so... I'll just shush now since Merci isn't either. >'.'>. -Lilytears
Date: 13/08/11 06:57:43 pm Title: Chapter 3
..........Not sure if she's legally allowed to own a gun, but to be honest, Merci starting to tick me off. Her attitude may be threatening and strong in the story itself, but for the readers, she's downright annoying. Because, as far as we see, we see a girl with an unrealistic attitude and the gun is like a sign saying: MARY SUE!
......And to be honest, she sounds a bit spoiled if you ask me. Not meaning to bash too hard, but I live with a sister that my dad dotes on, and a brother that everyone on my mom's half of the family buys everything for. I swear to God, if he asked for an island of his own and they had the money, they will freaking buy it for him. But don't mind me and my life, which I was elaborating about, I will get back to Merci (whose name is befitting actually. XD).
LET'S PUT THE GUN DOWN GENTLY. VERY, VERY GENTLY, AND KICK IT OVER THE CLIFF.
The only time I'll ever touch a gun is when the zombie apocalypse is five minutes away. Then I'll start having fun. >:D And I believe the only time Merci should ever actually touch her gun is not for bullying, but for actual use, like if a troll's about to bite her head off or there's a fairy in her house and they just stepped on one of her cats.
But major criticism aside, Artemis, get ready to get a tan. Or a sunburn. Either way, do you live in California? I live up in the bay area, which is freezing cold, but my former abode had once been the valley. Which I believe is the second hottest place in the entire state when it is summer. I wanna move down to L.A though......