Date: 15/03/12 10:05:48 pm Title: Chapter 6 help!!
Um...well, there's always time to write, even if it is only five minutes before you go to bed. I try to write ten minutes a day, at least, and with that I eventually get things done...or would, if I had any ideas at the moment. And procrastination? I wish I could help, but I'm terrible. >,<
Author's Response: Err thanks :)
Date: 30/12/11 10:16:27 am Title: Swell plop!!!!!!!!!!!!
Af1 is once again, right. We are all willing to help you become a better writer.
Hmm. Why don't you try writing a short story with a conversation between Holly and Artemis over some new technology. Like iPads and their opinions on it?
Just throwing ideas out there. Good luck in writing!
Author's Response: Ok but I have my own ideas!:)
Date: 29/12/11 09:10:20 pm Title: Swell plop!!!!!!!!!!!!
It is true. My original stories were some of the worst things in existence. As AF1 said, we are completely willing to help you grow.
What I did was take a break for a couple months to write a single one-shot.
Though you may not take as much time as I did, the idea of working slowly for quality is still there.
He asked life of thee, [and] thou gavest [it] him, [even] length of days for ever and ever.
Author's Response: That sounds like a good idea . Btw can u tell why you always quote odd books or the Chirstania bible? cuz I dont get that
Date: 29/12/11 08:58:45 pm Title: Swell plop!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is talking to all authors who have reviewed this story:Dang!!!! I can't believe this many people responded to my review! And DW and Ivy saw it too!!! Man guys, I'm really honored and no one's yelling at me for leaving months ago and not coming back.
Now to you artyisawesome:Okay, let's just take a step back from all this. I understand that you are feeling hurt and offended. That’s natural, I mean this probably is not at all how you planned your first day to pan out. I can hardly imagine what I might have felt like if I had gotten these types of review on my first day. However YOU have to try to see if from OUR point of view. You are on the internet now. We will NOT see a self-tortured teenager who gets beat up every day and cuts herself on the days she doesn’t. We will NOT see a 40 year old stalker who’s trying to kidnap every young girl who touches a computer. We will not see an 11 year old who has gotten beat up in the past. We see a penname and the results of that penname.At the moment the result are not looking good. You are not writing fanfiction. You are asking for attention. I don’t know what’s going on in your life, but though this is not the real world it’s not sheltered. We are not going to like you until you give us a reason to like you. Trust me, we WANT to like you, but we can’t until you give us that reason to.
You say you’re a good writer, no offence but Ivy’s right. You have little to know experience writing, so you’re probably not. I have been writing fanfiction for over 2 years and I still don’t think I’m that good. I thought I was a good writer in 5th grade. Now I cringe at the sight of my writing. It’s a work in progress. You might be good. I don’t know.And please do not disrespect Ivy for saying she knows how you feel. Almost everyone here knows how you feel. We’ve all been dissed pretty badly. It’s what being an author is about. You will never be good enough. Ever. None of us will. We were all new and inexperienced.
To add to artemisrocks9’s comment: Being bullied isn’t too pity inducing, and I’m sorry about that. It really should be and this isn’t an issue I have with you it’s an issue I have with society. Bullying just isn’t pity inducing. Almost every American child has either been bullied or bullied by the time they’re 14. I can name a few people ON THIS SITE right now who have been bullied pretty bad, but I won’t for their privacy.
I would like to make one thing clear: WE DO NOT HATE YOU. In fact I'm pretty sure we can like you a lot. Trust me, when AR9 came on, there was a lot of dislike going on there. Sorry, but you’re writing was pretty bad back then. She had this really awful OC (original character, since you’re new, I didn’t figure that out for MONTHS) who had Arty falling in the palm of her hand after meeting her the second time. I thought MK would have ripped off her head if they didn’t live however many miles apart. Now AR9 is one of the most respected constant authors on this site. In fact she got this type of treatment a lot. Now we all love her.
So stop acting so defensive. We ARE attacking you. But we are not trying to hurt you. We are trying to help you. You have to be torn down before you can be built up. Please please please don’t treat us like we’re out to destroy you. We aren’t. We are trying to help you. Let us. I can gurentee that every single author here would be more than willing to help you out if you need advice on your writing or and editing job, or really anything. If no one is (which I HIGHLY doubt) I will personally teach you everything I know about writing.I do not take back what I said in my first review and I do not apologize for any of it. But if you actually take to heart what everyone here is saying, you can be respected. You can make friends. But try to take things a little slower first, kay? Don’t expect people to fall at your feet. Try to win us over with your writing before you try to make us your friends. artyfan1
P.S. Being bipolar means you have a medical disease that messes with the hormone levels in your brain. This causes most commonly extreme mood swings and weird quirks. I have a friend who has a bipolar friend. She can be the craziest thing you’ve ever met jumping around, smiling, laughing and being perky to the point it’s scary (and I’m talking about greeting literally every single person you walk across by shaking their hand, hugging, and jumping around them) and then changing mood so quickly you’d think they’re switched personalities with some (acting like some emo goth chick literally a minute after you hugged a complete stranger) There are different levels, but that’s the one I’m most familiar with and the one most people refer toPPS: Sorry about the three review you’re getting. Ther first two were coming out as one giant block of text which is bad
Author's Response: What three review and I am reapply sorry
Date: 29/12/11 06:33:13 pm Title: Swell plop!!!!!!!!!!!!
Really, "being through a lot" is also not an excuse to be rude. Believe me, you do not know the meaning of that until you have had something truely serious happening to you. I don't mean bullying. I mean something more around the lines of watching your mother have a seizure (hmmm, guess who has gone through THAT multiple times?).
Sorry if I sounded mean there, because I really don't want to, but what you did can not just be explained away by pathetic excuses.
And mount Sinai was altogether on a smoke, because the Lord descended upon it in fire: and the smoke thereof ascended as the smoke of a furnace, and the whole mount quaked greatly.
Author's Response: Why do u always have quote from a book at the of ur reviews cuz it's weird no offense
Date: 29/12/11 03:31:39 pm Title: Swell plop!!!!!!!!!!!!
First things first - my heart died a bit when I read this. I'm sorry. It did.
But I wasn't going to condemn you to insta-death/RAAAAWWRR. And then I looked at the reviews. And I saw your responses to them.
I've known Artyfan1 since I joined this site - do you know how old I was when I joined this site?
I was eleven. Like you. And trust me, most of the stuff I wrote when I was eleven was crap. It still is crap. It's just been shoved into a dark corner of my mind and left there - and I, frankly, never want to read it again.
Keep writing and you'll feel that in a few years. I can promise that. If you're so convinced that you are a great writer, you're a bad one. I've been in your shoes before - and while I knew what a comma was and how to spell the word "you", I understand how you're feeling.
Unfortunately, even though I understand how you're feeling, I can't feel much sympathy for you, especially after you disrespected Artyfan1 like that.
If you're so sensitive, don't swear at her. It makes you look like an immature, disrespectful person, and I have half a mind to swear at you like you did to her and see how you like it. I'll bet you wouldn't feel too hot.
We can help you. We can be civil. But you're not helping yourself.
Author's Response: First how do u know What I am feeling? I am sorry for swearing Ill explain more later when I get on the compuer
Date: 29/12/11 02:55:36 pm Title: Swell plop!!!!!!!!!!!!
Look, I’m not going to be “ooh, let’s shower this person with awesomness because they’re being rude!” A.K.A, Nice. Take this how you want, but this makes me really angry.
You should be thanking AF1 for writing that much. If she was really trying to bully you, she would write 5 words, not nearly 1,000. Even I wouldn’t write that much. She’s just THAT AWESOME. Respect her.
And, by the way? Your spirit is NOT fragile if you’re using language like that. Grow up, please. Honestly. You just look like a rude, immature, and stupid child with language like that. Don’t get me wrong, I’m not calling you that, but that’s what my current opinion of you is- and that can be easily swayed.
Also, you’re not a good writer. I can tell you that now. At least, that’s what it looks like at the current moment. The biggest part of being a good writer is NOT writing well. It’s using correct spelling, capitalization, and punctuation. And guess what? You’re not using any of those. It doesn’t matter that you’re on your mom’s phone. I was tempted to write this on my iPod just to prove to you that laziness is the reason for this…*insert word of choice here*. Not the fact that you’re a slow typer, that you’re on a phone, or the fact that it was midnight when you were being so rude to one of the best people on here. And, “Also i am a way better author than u so don't mess with Me because am tough and know peps. Pretty impresezize for an 11 year old.”
What are peps? Like, pepper? Or, like, cheerleaders? And, what the GLaDOS is that word supposed to be? It’s spelt impressive, dear. Unless you were going for the word ”seizure.”, which I think you just might have been closer to spelling. And, since when is “u” a word?
Now, we’re all willing to help you here. We’re all willing to put this behind us and help you grow as an author. But, you want AF1 to…apologize for doing this? No, you’re the one who should be apologizing. And, DW reviewed. That in itself means that some SERIOUS BUISNESS IS GOING DOWN RIGHT HERE.
Now, to see if I can find something nice to say.
Welcome to AFCFF. I would say that I hope you stay, but honestly? If you keep up with this attitude, I think I speak on behalf of all of us when I say that no, I really don’t.
Scratch that. That wasn’t nice at all.
Welcome to AFCFF. I believe that you can do better than this.
There. That’s the kindest you’re getting from me.